The Official Writing Challenge
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Good poem about the two books that are so critical to life!
I would suggest you be careful to find creative rhymes that flow with the poem. A lot of the rhymes you used feel like they were "forced" to me, as a reader.
I really like your opening stanza, both gripping and interesting, perfect for drawing the reader in.
As a reader, I thought the poem was well-written. ...It's just not totally clear to me what you intended to show was being reviewed. I see us as reviewing God as the writer of the Bible and God as reviewing us as we write our own book of life.
05/15/10
Without the Title to give me understanding, I might not have understood where this was going at first. But the two Books you write about, The "Bible" and the "Book of Life", were not only a creative way to approach this week's Topic, but done so beautifully in poetic form. I only wish you had capitalized the First words, at least; but the smooth flow of the poem, the thoughts, the message and the creativity far outshown the petty lack of capitals. Kudos! Great job! Impressive.
05/16/10
Tremendous truths in this lovely poem. Loved the comparison of the two books. I agree with Benjamin about some of the rhyming seeming forced, but not enough to distract a lot from the message. However, the lack of capital letters at the beginning of each line was a distraction for me, but I tend to be OCD about punctuation and grammar - picky, picky, picky! "Normal" people won't be bothered by it, I guess. ;)