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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: The Ultimate Price
By Marijo Phelps
05/06/10


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My final critique
My last review
I stand in awe
My Savior, of you

Being on the outside
Looking in
But having asked
Forgiveness of sin

I wait in heaven
With dropped jaw
Not even comprehending
The splendor of all

Most welcome words
I’ve yet to hear
Yet standing tall
Without any fear

You see I asked
Years ago
To be forgiven
I am, I know

Looking around
Can’t take it in
Heaven’s wonder
Me, forgiven of sin

You would have gone
Been whipped
And died
My Savior, crucified

Had there only been
The one of me
You’d still have died
Upon that tree

Unbelievable price
Paid complete
My soul you bought
Satan’s defeat

You so majestic
I so small
Your eyes turn
Kneeling, I fall

You stepped down
Arms opened wide
Lifted and drew me
To your side

I saw those scars
In your nail pierced hands
My many choices
Your death demands

But you paid it all
Upon that tree
Put to death
For many of “me”

Boldly claiming
For all to hear
“Well done daughter,
My servant so dear.”

My final critique
My last review
You lifted me up
Drew me closer to You.


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The Masked Truelovers05/13/10
nicely written poem containing solid spiritual truth. ...You might have only hit on half the topic though. But it was a very well written theologically accurate poem.
Dana McReynolds05/13/10
Beautiful poem and ultimately the only critique that will matter.
Brenda Shipman05/14/10
Original take on the topic, filled with the marvelous truth that our "critique" is based on what Jesus has already done on our behalf. Nice.
Amanda Brogan05/14/10
Lovely! I like the part that says:

"You stepped down
Arms opened wide
Lifted and drew me
To your side."

And of course, the part where Jesus says "Well done." A moment I look forward to with all my being. Nicely written.

Marilyn Schnepp 05/15/10
After reading and critiquing many an entry this week...this is the first one that brought to tears; it Touched me deeply! That, to me, is a sign of a great writer...to be able to bring emotion, of either tears or laughter to your reader...and you did it! For me! Excellent job!
Terry R A Eissfeldt 05/17/10
Thanks
Enjoyed it. Well done!
Joanna Stricker05/17/10
Ah, I think you nicely explained the most important critique of all, and I enjoyed your description of the awe we will all feel toward the splendor of heaven.
Beth LaBuff 05/18/10
You've beautifully penned this poem about the ultimate and final critique. I, too, eagerly look forward to "looking around heaven's wonder." This is so very good!
Mildred Sheldon05/18/10
Absolutely beautiful. The ultimate critique from Christ. I loved this very much. Thank you.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/19/10
Beautiful witness--Me, too, eager for the final critique.
Marita Thelander 05/19/10
Ahh...so thankful for amazing grace.
Verna Mull05/25/10
This should have been a winner! The subject matter surely is, and it was well done!