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05/07/10
This is one of the best love stories I have ever read. Excellent writing, how true that some things can't be fixed, but with Jesus' help sometimes they can be put right.
05/10/10
You've packed this gripping story with emotion from the beginning, wow! I'm glad Andy showed the reality of his changed life by going to the hospital. I loved your ending!
05/10/10
I felt the first part of this story was the strongest.
You always have some really great details/touches that I enjoy.
Very nice writing, Sarah Elisabeth.
05/11/10
So real, it brought tears to my eyes. Powerfully descriptive writing here, filled with physical and emotional details which ensure reading through to the end--which was a blessing. Thank you.
05/11/10
Wow! Wow! Wow! That was powerful, I loved it and it definitely brought tears to my eyes.
05/11/10
Beautiful, emotional with such real, raw dialogue. This is an excellent entry!
05/11/10
Very real, with authentic actions, dialogue. I loved the smidgeon of hope at the end... not all the way "happily ever after," because that's not real, but just that hopeful glimmer.
05/11/10
Perfect. This story is beautiful beyond what words can express!
05/11/10
Very emotionally gripping! I love how you use the wedding photo as a description of their marriage. . . first with her saying it can't be fixed, and then with him saying it can. Love that twist! The title ties it together beautifully. I can't think of a single red ink remark. :)

And for him to burn his manuscript to display his love for her. . . that is just so sweet! Great ending!
05/11/10
You haven't lost your touch. I was pulled into your story completely.
05/11/10
You've done it again. I always look forward to reading your stories and you haven't let me down. Great, emotionally riveting and so realistic.
05/12/10
The raw emotion of your story is incredible. I lived this exact story with my own wife over the last year. Your words couldn't possibly be more accurate.
05/12/10
Oh, Wow....loved this. Was completely engrossed in this with so many different emotions!

Now THIS needs to continue!!!
05/12/10
Just beautiful, Sarah. I can feel the angst and raw emotion in both characters. Wonderfullly done.
05/12/10
I wrote a really nice reply, but instead of clicking the review button, I closed the browser ... DUH!

I really liked this ... an awesome read. Great job.
05/12/10
I'm a sucker for a happy ending. Well written. Good job.
05/14/10
Hey, Sarah!

I've been told my writing is cliché...so please don't be offended when I tell you that you use a few clichés. Can you pick them out? :)

I felt the story wrapped up a little too easily with him chucking his manuscript...something he will no doubt regret.

I like Margaret. She really shows up in the dialogue you've given her and her actions.