The Official Writing Challenge
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05/06/10
Wow, trully out of the broken places beauty can come through Christ Jesus. I think there should have been a page break befoe those final 2 paragraphs where the point of view changes. Good job.
This what I call a pow wow! The use of "Love Hurts," and certain literary bridges kept me their through jumps in time.
05/07/10
Very compelling writing. A few missed commas here and there, but the last two paragraphs more than make up for those teeny glitches. Extremely powerful.
This was so powerful. I am thankful for kleenex. Love hurts drew me like a moth to the flames. I've witnessed first hand how abuse can torment a child. I truly enjoyed this. God bless
05/08/10
Intense and powerful! It hurt to even read this, but I'm so thankful and grateful for that healing love of Jesus.
05/09/10
SO powerful. Your voice is just excellent - I felt like I knew her. Wow.
05/11/10
Very powerful and packed with raw emotion. (A little polishing and a few commas required.)
05/11/10
Your story is haunting. Your theme, "Love hurts," is powerful. I wished you had more than 750 words to write with when I came to the end.