The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story kept me reading even though I wasn't quite sure what it was all about. Ah, mystery! There's something magic about it. But your story ended too abruptly to suit me. I would have liked to read more.
05/07/10
This is a VERY clever idea!

My only problem is with the POV switch at the end--it's necessary because of the events in the last few paragraphs, but it's a bit jarring nevertheless.

I loved the science fiction/fantasy/mystery aura of this, and the aha! moment of realization at the end.
WOW! That's about all I can say. The suspense drew me in like a moth to the flame. Outstanding.
05/08/10
How creative! Loved the message you presented here!
05/11/10
Very creative piece, Marijo. Love the eeriness.
05/11/10
Fascinating concept. You definitely need to write more of this. I want to know more about your first character.
05/11/10
Great creativity here and perfect reminder that our days/lives are being written. Your title in relation to that is wonderful.
05/11/10
Oh wow! What a creative idea! This could be developed into a longer story!
05/12/10
Wow! Fantastic and I love it!