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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Writer’s Skill/Craft (04/22/10)

TITLE: Mixed Metaphors
By Emily Gibson
04/29/10


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Some days it starts like a little tickle
right under the nose-
a bit of an itch, wrinkled, rubbed
yet building uncontrolled
to a point of release that
explodes in a sneeze into a sleeve.
It feels so much better afterward
though a tissue would have helped
to catch it before tossing.

Some days it is a sense of being off,
a little dizzy, maybe queasy,
wishing it away only makes it
more miserably inevitable,
gagging in building anticipation
before it has to be let go
in a flood of relief,
flushed quickly
without looking to be gone forever.

Some days it is the tiniest flutter
felt deep within, at first almost not there
but slowly growing, changing,
building cell by cell,
knitted in secret,
each part laid down exactly
where it is meant to be,
created perfectly, beautifully,
uniquely.

Until the day when a twinge
becomes sharp, the pressure
builds to aching recognition,
there is no stopping the push,
not tears nor cries of anguish
can halt the progress to
the light of a new day,
breathing fresh air, softly wrapped
to the sweet music of words.

A poem is born.


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Beth LaBuff 04/29/10
I enjoyed your whole creative concept here! What a perfect title too! Great work!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/30/10
I loved your description of the birth of a poem.
Beth LaBuff 04/30/10
I enjoyed and smiled at each metaphor you creatively used here! Great work on this!
Margaret Kearley 05/03/10
Can identify with this one! A great description of the birth of a poem! Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/06/10
Congratulations in placing in the top 15 in your level and in the top 30 overall.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/06/10
Congratulations in placing in the top 15 in your level and in the top 30 overall.