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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Reader (04/15/10)

TITLE: So Much to be Thankful For
By Noel Mitaxa
04/21/10


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Scarcely a day goes by that I don’t think of you. I'm only too aware of how much I need you and how much my own future depends on you. For without you my dreams would be just that. Dreams.

You fill my sails. You help me to soar. But you also keep my feet on the ground.

How can I find the right words to thank you?

You are a real pick-me-up. I enjoy our relationship so much that I’m continually searching for new ways to please you, or tease you, to stretch your mind, to build your confidence and to ensure your loyalty and respect.

I love how you aren’t afraid to show how you feel about me and the work I do. For you so naturally allow others see us together: on park benches; leaning against the trunks of shady trees; on picnic blankets or on crowded commuter trains; that nobody else seems to take any notice at all.

But the times I like best are those special times that dissolve all time constraints, or when we erase the stress of churning over what others seem to delight in doing – as if their special calling in life is to make things as difficult as possible for you. It’s great to be in bed together; or to be nestled into a comfortable chair by the fire, when the cheerless gloom outside is overcome by the radiant fragrance of blazing pine logs.

Did you ever imagine you’d ever venture into all we’ve been through together? We’ve travelled the world; we‘ve reached for the sky and touched the stars; we’ve punched holes through horizons that once seemed so threatening; and we’ve opened new frontiers that still stretch out ahead of us, inviting us to explore them.

How about some of those characters we’ve met along the way, and how they have interacted or reacted with each other? Could you have met them all by yourself?

Many of these people have been – and deservedly stayed – as obscure as the modesty of their achievements. But others, despite their anonymity, have changed the course of history.

Has it been hard to keep the secret interests or character flaws of household names to yourself?

It’s been an eye-opener to delve together into the motives of the heroes and the zeroes as we’ve exposed frauds, explored crime scenes and tracked down crooks whose labyrinthine schemes looked undetectable to the radar screens of the forces of justice.

And hasn't wading through those political intrigues been a battle for our sanity. For all the while we have been confronting the fudging, smudging, breathtaking excuses from operatives and their shonky tactics; they have been attuning their receptors for the slightest amount of credit that might drift in their direction, because looking good is all that matters to them.

Hasn’t it been an adventure to trace the growth of true love from the first spark of interest within two hesitant hearts: each daring to hope that the targets of their affection will respond in kind; fervently engineering events to ensure surprise meetings that are thinly camouflaged as routines. Such contriving is then ground down in the reality of accepting each other despite their faults - or others’ suspicions or competition - until they begin to generate new beauty and strength in shared commitment which only deepens with the passing of time.

Yet from the beginning of our relationship, your appearance or your background has never been an issue for me. For you are an athlete and a klutz, cheerful and depressed, neat-freak and slob, arrogant and humble, curious and blasé, bald and fluffy, fitness-fanatic and one who likes to sit down until any urge to exercise goes away, team member and Prima Donna, old and young, well-travelled and parochial, garrulous and shyly introverted, wealthy and poor, male and female.

Well may you ask how you combine all these contradictory attributes…

Simply because you are my reader; and I’d love to believe that you vastly outnumber the only one of me that there is.


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Beth LaBuff 04/22/10
Extremely creative, all-encompassing! I was so sure your were writing to your wife (and it was beautiful to read). Your final sentence made me laugh (out loud). :) After your last paragraph I reread your entry with clarity. :) There were many "aha" moments then! (and some of your descriptions made me examine myself) It's the first time I've been called a "Klutz" publicly. :)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/24/10
Very creative and interesting. I enjoyed it thoroughly
AnneRene' Capp 04/26/10
I found this cleverly entertaining and well put. Definitely describes all of us readers and writers!
Catrina Bradley 04/26/10
Second person POV is hard to pull off effectively, but you've done it. Very creative how you turned the topic on its head, so to speak, making it not about the reader, but written to him. Beautiful language; a very serene, comfortable feeling, just like the feeling of curling up with a good book. Well done!
Gregory Kane05/11/10
This is very creative and as has been said you successfully pulled off a second person POV. My own feeling about your story is that it doesn't flow smoothly, but rather tends to move forward in jerks and stops. The reader isn't really sure what's going on until right at the end. But it is clever. And it's nice to see you exploring a non-Biblical genre for a change!
CD Swanson 07/28/12
Wow! This is so completely amazing and creative. But, most of all...so true!

I loved it. Thank-you it's just what I needed to read at this time.

God Bless~