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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Reader (04/15/10)

TITLE: Polishing A Diamond Times Two
By Virgil Youngblood
04/20/10


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Polishing A Diamond Times Two



Benson climbed into his father’s wingback recliner with his favorite book of nursery rhymes. The huge chair engulfed the four year old boy squirming into a sitting position.

“Jack and Jill went up the hill, looking for a quarter. Jack fell down and …”

Linda heard her son before she located him. “What are you doing, Benson?”

“This is a good story, Momma.”

“Did you sit on Daddy’s lap and look at that book?”

“Um, hmm. Do you want me to read you a story?”

“I would love it. What happened when Jack fell down?”

“Uh,,,Uh… Benson pointed at the page and began tracing his finger across it. “Jack fell down and said, ‘you tripped my daughter.’ That’s so funny, Momma.”

“Is that all it says?”

“No, Momma. Listen.” Benson pushed his finger across the page. “All the king’s men didn’t put him together again.” Benson drummed his heels against the chair, laughing. “That’s so funny, Momma.”

“Oh, that’s great. Jack and Jill and the king’s men. You love reading with your Daddy don’t you?”

“Um, hmm. Can I have a cookie, Momma?”

“After supper. It won’t be long.”

“Do you want to hear Mary’s lamb?”

“Can I look at the pictures while you read?”

“No, Mommy. You sit there.” Benson pointed to a foot stool, and then turned a page in the book. “Mary told her lamb to scram. She told the king’s men to go eat ham. What’s scram, Mommy?”

“Didn’t Daddy tell you?”

“No, he just read the story to me.”

“Well, he taught you really well, I must say. Do you want me to get you another book while I fix supper?”

“There are more stories in this one. I like the turtle and snail race, too.”

“My, my. You remember everything Daddy said, don’t you?

“He taught me how to read, Mommy. He said he was going to A-fan-i-stand and I needed to read on my own. When’s he coming back, Mommy? I miss him.”

“I know, Sweetie.” Tenderly smoothing Benson’s unruly brown hair, her wedding ring sparkled in the lamp light. She kissed him on the top of his head. “I miss him too.”

“I’ll be your big boy, Mommy. That’s what Daddy told me to do.”

Linda stood, wiping a tear from her cheek. “Maybe he will call tonight on Skype and you can read to him.” A giggle escaped as she noticed the book in Benson’s lap. “My little man, Daddy forgot to tell you something. You can read better if you turn the book around.”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/24/10
I really enjoyed this. The ending was great
Beth LaBuff 04/26/10
I loved this beautiful tender moment. (It made me miss my grandkids!) The mood you create and dialog of your characters seem very good! Nice work!
Loren T. Lowery04/27/10
Only from the imagination of a child can we discover such stories. That they were remembered at all is a high salute to the parent(s) that read to them in the first place. Shows a great deal of love in the family. I noticed that you included the title of your story in the body of your article. That's not necessary and it will help with your word count. Great job, nice story.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/29/10
Congratulations in placing in the top 40 over-all and in the top 15 of your level. Good job!