The Official Writing Challenge
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A delightful read. Good writing.
This was such an interesting step back into time. I so enjoyed the journey.
04/20/10
Enjoyed your story. A bit of space (extra lines perhaps?)between the past and present would have made it a little easier for the reader - I struggled a little with the transition.
04/20/10
I liked the epic proportions of this story. You had me totally involved in this ethnic tale. It reminds me of the verse in Proverbs about moving the ancient boundary. Very nice!
This is a very creative story. I was a bit confused during the fast-forward at first. Nice plot though, and my favorite-a happy ending!
04/21/10
I had no problems with the time transitions at all. The paragraphs about the barren and then grassy lands did the job (in my opinion) far better than extra line spaces would have done.

Good story, well written.