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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Pen is Mightier than the Sword (04/08/10)

TITLE: Battle-Starfish Galactic
By Beth LaBuff
04/13/10


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A lunar legend specifies that,
“Once upon the moon,
A house comprised of lunar rock,
Located on a dune—
The dune, nearby Moon River,
The stream—a mile wide,
Flowed to Sea of Tranquility,
Drawn by the lunar tide.” –

Inside the house of lunar rock
A lunar-fellow dwelt,
Each night opened his moon roof
To view Orion’s belt.
The locals called him Houston
And he was prone to weep
Cause Houston had a problem,
At night he couldn’t sleep.

Fishing was the commerce and
An export from the moon
Was starfish caught within the Sea,
Transported to Neptune.
On Neptune, Flambéed Starfish was
A savory delight.
The starfish were elusive—
They were only caught at night.

Two lunar factions fought over
The starfish fishing rights,
Faction A and Faction B
Kept Houston up at night.
Their lunar fighting halted
Starfish exports to Neptune.
The fighting worsened leaving Houston
Sleepless on the moon.

The lunar weapon residue
From starfish fighting war
Had left a toxic nebula
That Houston couldn’t ignore.
It finally reached a zenith so
A Neptune emissary
Was sent to procure starfish and
Seek peace for the contrary.

The Neptune emissary’s thoughts—
How can we end this clash?
Appeal on grounds their pocketbooks
Are strapped for lunar cash?
Or maybe to their lunar pride,
“Please DO NOT shoot the moon!”

He thought— how to persuade these folk?
Thought hard all afternoon.

Placards! – What a stellar plan
To post on crater walls!

His message: “End hostility!”
And “No more lunar brawls!”
“There’s countless starfish in the Sea—
There’s no need to be greedy!”
“Faction A and Faction B—
You need a lunar treaty!”

“A workable solution to
Your starfish-fishing plight,
I have a contract drafted to
Present to you tonight.”
The lunar dwellers read the signs,
And gave them lots of thought.
The crater-placards did what all
Their lunar fights could not.

***
The legend states, “’Twas a blue moon
When Factions A and B
Had worked out an agreement—
No more fighting o’er the Sea.
When moon waxed, Faction A would fish,”
The treaty did explain,
“Then Faction B had fishing rights
When lunar moon would wane.”

The emissary’s mission saw
The lunar fighting cease.
The Neptunites had starfish and
Each moonchild lived in peace,
And by the light of silvered moon
The nebula had faded.
The Factions fished while Houston snored—
The moonlight serenaded.

***
Inspirational verse:
Blessed are the peacemakers.
Matthew 5:9 NIV



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Verna Cole Mitchell 04/15/10
Awesome creativity here with a delightful story tied together by great description and clever rhyme
Charla Diehl 04/15/10
As always, another great poem written only the way you can pen them. What an imagination you have and what fun your entries are each week. Great job.
Jackie Wilson04/15/10
Absolutely stellar! I see this little "movie" with all these characters on the moon, playing out in my head as I'm reading this! My favorite line: "Houston had a problem". Great fun to read, and appreciate the topic-relevant scripture reference.
Loren T. Lowery04/16/10
What first caught my eye were the words from "Moon River" - is was my second piano recital piece, so it's always been special. Then I kept reading and was drawn into and remained fascinated by the way you wove this story together. So much to appreciate about this poem - so much to learn from it as well..."lunar treaty" and all.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/17/10
This is such a delightful tale, it would make a beautifully illustrated book.
Lynda Schultz 04/17/10
Wonderful play on words, great poem and terrific entertainment.
Patricia Herchenroether04/17/10
Very cleverly done. You certainly have a good sense of word-play. Love it.
Joan Campbell04/18/10
Very creative concept and beautifully written. A delight to read!
Gregory Kane04/18/10
A most intriguing title too
Maria Egilsson 04/19/10
Beth, found you! I'm a newbie and I sure want to learn from you!!
Virgil Youngblood 04/20/10
The only thing missing in this delightful poem is a Starfish receipe.
Ruth Stromquist04/20/10
My favorite line too, "Cause Houston had a problem." A fun read!
Gerald Shuler 04/21/10
You rode the Muse-mobile all the way to the end with this one. I love it. I agree with others about the best line... Houston had a problem. Fortunately, he also had a solution.
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/21/10
Great poem! There were a few places I tripped on the meter, but enjoyed the reading.
angelos2 wark04/21/10
Wow! My favorite thus far for stepping outside the box!

Some great lines. I agree with some of the others about "houston."

Quite the imagination. Good job B---!
Carol Penhorwood 04/21/10
I too LOVED your play on words. What creativity...ALWAYS! I am a huge fan.
Carol Slider 04/21/10
So creative and fun to read! Your use of language is, as always, astounding! Very, very well done.
Joanna Stricker04/21/10
Far out! I could see this almost turning into a nursery rhyme, but it is far too sophisticated. I don't know how you do it, but excellent word play and flow!
Marita Thelander 04/21/10
You got all that out of Matthew 5:9? You're good. :) enjoyed it to the moon and back.
Sarah Elisabeth 04/21/10
I sooo look forward to reading your poems, yay for the challenge being back!!!

"Houston had a problem." Oh my, I lol'ed on that one!
Edmond Ng 04/22/10
A nicely written poem out of this world!
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/22/10
Congratulations, dear Friend, on yet another well-deserved EC!
Noel Mitaxa 04/22/10
Soon there will be a book of your poems, Beth, and it will be called "Editor's Choice." Well done again.
Jackie Wilson04/22/10
Beth, congratulations on EC placing on this sparkling entry!
Joshua Janoski04/22/10
I absolutely love the title! But the title isn't the only thing that stands out.

You always manage to be clever and funny with your poetry. I struggle to even write a simple poem (as the secret agent in my last story demonstrated), but it comes so natural to you.

You have always been one of my favorite authors on FaithWriters and will continue to be with great pieces like this. Congrats on the placement, Beth! :)
Carol Slider 04/22/10
As I read this over again, I'm amazed once more by your detailed craftsmanship and wonderful use of language. Congratulations, Beth! SO well-deserved!
Rachel Phelps04/22/10
Beth, as always, I stand in awe of your poetic talent. Amazing!
Patricia Turner04/22/10
Beth, I just want someday to be as amazingly creative as you are. :) Super-duper congratulations!
Sarah Elisabeth 04/23/10
Super duper congrats, Beth! You are an amazing writer!
Amanda Brogan04/23/10
What an amazingly witty and creative poem! This is such a cute story, and delivers the topic with a great deal of fun.

Congrats on your win!
Helen Dowd 04/24/10
Congratulations on your second place win. You deserve it. With your imagery, imagination, ingenuity, and your talented poetry you have created a masterpiece...Blessings...Helen