The Official Writing Challenge
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Jealousness and lonliness are a deadly combination.

This story seemed very real and had a good flow to it.

I like the referrance to the car wreck like the ones shown in Driver's Ed. That painted a very graphic picture of the scene.
I totally got where you were coming from and it was done beautifully. Girls can be so mean. I'm glad Jenna learned about forgiveness.
04/15/10
I thought you captured the teenagers' immature way of thinking and acting in a very realistic way.
I felt all the emotions swirling through this well-written story. Great entry.
I was getting worried we were going to lose Jenna at the end, which shows you effectively got me caught up into the emotions of the story. Well written.
04/20/10
You showed how the pen can tear down and build up!
Wow, this moved me to tears. Loved the powerful ending message. Totally felt for Jenna and understood her. Awesome story.
04/21/10
Well written.
I was impressed with the way you depicted the Pen as both "pen and sword."