The Official Writing Challenge
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04/15/10
Jealousness and lonliness are a deadly combination.

This story seemed very real and had a good flow to it.

I like the referrance to the car wreck like the ones shown in Driver's Ed. That painted a very graphic picture of the scene.
04/15/10
I totally got where you were coming from and it was done beautifully. Girls can be so mean. I'm glad Jenna learned about forgiveness.
04/15/10
I thought you captured the teenagers' immature way of thinking and acting in a very realistic way.
04/17/10
I felt all the emotions swirling through this well-written story. Great entry.
04/19/10
I was getting worried we were going to lose Jenna at the end, which shows you effectively got me caught up into the emotions of the story. Well written.
04/20/10
You showed how the pen can tear down and build up!
04/21/10
Wow, this moved me to tears. Loved the powerful ending message. Totally felt for Jenna and understood her. Awesome story.
04/21/10
Well written.
I was impressed with the way you depicted the Pen as both "pen and sword."