The Official Writing Challenge
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You had my rapt attention throughout, weaving picturesque detail into each segment of your story. Good work.
I enjoyed this story, and especially liked the feeling of closure in the final paragraph. (I also liked that Tess' suitcase was pink, I could see it waiting in the trunk!)
Oooh, I love this story. I could have kept on reading. I love your ending, too. Awesome writing.
This is, for sure, a story to be coninued. I'm waiting....
Double wow from me! The opening and closing were top notch and the middle was like cream in between. Very excellent. God bless.
You made me feel as though I were Tess. Captivating story, and I too, would like to see this continue.
Really liked the way this was told in hushed tones - a secret yet to be revealed. Quiet with anticipation. The child's POV never lost - a dawning not quite yet, a co-existence, a delicate balance, one would hope never be faced to explain.
Well presented.
This is beautifully told from the child's point of view, no "unseemly details" because the child didn't know any. "Haunting" aptly describes this story. Excellent writing!
I felt the tension the whole way and hoped it had a good ending. So sad...