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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Wow! (03/11/10)

TITLE: A Sunset View
By Jesus Puppy
03/11/10


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A sunset view . . .

He stood upon the rim of creation, and looked out upon the work of his hands.

At first there was chaos in the swirl of time's flow, the view clouded with the end result overlaid. Words were uttered and light reached out from the depths of his being to fill the emptiness of the void, bringing order to his artful vision.

With a touch, he separated the airs about him, parting the waters to the utmost foundations. There he placed Leviathan, and covered it with a date for its awakening. In the center of his world he placed the consuming fire, and sealed it for judgement yet to come

Then, reaching out to the far ends of space, he cast the stars in motion, giving them their guided paths to tell the tale. Each constellation he named from that day, to be as signs throughout history yet to come.

In this new light he labored in planting, growing a garden in his delight. Trees in plenty, for food to eat and shade for the weary. Tall towers in forest so vast, and carpets of color with flowers blooming unnumbered-- except by him, each one.

He spoke to the Earth and animals came forth, cattle in the fields and birds to fill the sky. To the waters he called and brought abundance, and to the ground the creatures that crawl. The trees were filled with their singing, and the air rang with praise in a language he alone understood.

From the dust he formed his greatest delight. The vision of its end overlaid its beginning, and with a tear he breathed into it -- life.

There He stood, upon the rim of creation, and looked out on the work of his hands. As HIS blood drops painted the sunset sky, he wept for the pain of its beauty.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/18/10
This is incredible, I often think of a sunset when I hear wow, but you described the most magnificent sunset ever. Outstanding writing.
stanley Bednarz 03/18/10
Poetic prose. Deeply connected. Yes. I liked it. Nice start for the category.
Edmond Ng 03/19/10
I like your approach of seeing the sunset from the eyes of the beholder describing the magnificence of God's creation. Creatively written to give the reader the sense of awe. Well done!
AnneRene' Capp 03/19/10
Your imagination is AWE...SOME! I was actually left breathless at so many of your creative descriptions and thoughts, and your last sentence...As HIS blood drops painted the sunset sky, He wept for the pain of its beauty...I was completely taken back in AWE!
Karen Pourbabaee 03/20/10
Inspiring...love the view from our Creator's eyes and your beautiful descriptions.
Gregory Kane03/22/10
I like the way that Hell is created long before man appears on the scene
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/22/10
Beautiful prose. I loved the thoughts and the way you expressed them.
Ann Grover03/22/10
Beautifully written... colourful imagery. And very creative ending... the blood in the sunset. I could hear echoes of "It is finished." I'll not see a sunset in the same way again.

(Tiny bit of red ink... being consistent with capitalizing "He" and "His.")
Darren Pettis03/22/10
God has shared a special talent with you ... your passion for God's creation is evident in your work. Share it with as masny as you can my friend. God Bless!
Beth LaBuff 03/22/10
This is beautiful poetic prose. Your images are vivid. Very nice work!
Rachel Phelps03/24/10
Wonderful! Your story made me sit still and read it slowly - and what a treat it was. Loved your poetic descriptions.
Loren T. Lowery03/24/10
Beautifully presented - the descriptions paint on canvass. The prose itself a wonderful story. Short, maybe - but the delivery - perfect.
Ruth Stromquist03/24/10
Incredibly awesome job! The way you wove in His Sovereign plans for His creation from the foundation of the world, with the actual act of creating is a VERY powerful message, to say the LEAST.
Sara Harricharan 03/24/10
WOW, indeed. This is breathtaking. I love the lyrical feel of it and the way it all just blends together without scotch tape. Excellently done. ^_^
william price03/24/10
This nails the topic squarely on its head. Super. Great rythm and anointed feel to it. A great, WOW. God bless.
c clemons03/25/10
A nice "wow".
Leah Nichols 03/25/10
I cried. This was beautiful. Please don't ever stop writing!
Carol Penhorwood 04/14/10
Pup, you truly have a gift...this was awesome. You painted a picture with words.