The Official Writing Challenge
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This was great. I felt like I knew Humph personally. I don't think you needed the last line though to get your message through to the reader. I totally knew he referred to Alice as Angel when she wasn't around. The details were so realistic. I was on the edge of my chair the whole time. Fantastic writing!
I liked this. Good description and dialogue. All characters came out very believable. The 7 year old reminds me of some of Beverly Cleary's writings. (Not sure I spelled her name right, but she was great at characterizations of kids about that age.)
03/13/10
I really enjoyed this story. Alice was adorable, and both characters were captivating, each in their own way.
03/18/10
I really enjoyed reading this. Beautiful story.
Vince.