The Official Writing Challenge
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I like hearing Bible stories in a new voice. You did a good job while keeping true to the facts.
03/17/10
I had to smile at the "How many farms include 'kings produced' columns in the annual audits?" :) The song titles were a riot. (nice touches of humor in this)
I'd never thought about David being in line for the throne because of a marriage to Saul's daughter. The David and Goliath story lends itself perfectly to the topic. You had well-placed "Hmph's!" here. Now I have a Disney song stuck in my head. :)
03/18/10
Not bad, the voice of this did a little bit of a seesaw, going from David to narration. But I like the way David thoughts could have gone. Put this together with the article I wrote on "Ow" from Goliath's point of view and we've got a story! :)