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03/12/10
Very engaging story, well-written, left me wanting more!
03/13/10
This captivated me. Can't wait for more!
03/14/10
Engaging, hold-your-breath story of a frightening situation.
03/14/10
Lots of emotion in this piece. Very intriguing, great writing.
03/14/10
I enjoyed this different POV of the story of Ruth. Well done. The attitude and reactions were very easy to see in my minds eye.
03/14/10
How did that happen? Why did my comment appear on the wrong story?

This entry had me holding my breath wondering what would happen next. There is definitely a longer story in this one... well done!
03/14/10
This is outstanding, even more suspenseful than the last one, again I could easily see this turn into an entire novel.
03/14/10
Great job of building suspense here. I definitely want to know what happens next!
03/14/10
Wow, that was close! What happens next?
03/15/10
It reminded me of the story of Corrie Ten Boom. You built the tension well. I would have liked to see less use of obvious cliches - the curling lip etc.
03/15/10
Great writing. Left me wanting more of the story. Well done.
03/15/10
This read like part II to another story. Very engaging. I like the part where she slapped him. Built up good tension. Great job. God bless.
03/15/10
I was reminded of Corrie Ten Boom also. You certainly drew me in and I wanted to read more!
03/15/10
I found my self flinching when he broke the last case, and tensing up when he touched her - whew! That was close. Super suspense writing! And I love the historical setting, too.
03/17/10
This is great historical writing. I was captivated throughout. Your title is perfect, in symbolism and foreshadowing. Wow!