The Official Writing Challenge
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This was a cute poem. The rhyming was great. I liked the lesson about onomatopoeia. It's one of my favorite words.

Small note you used to instead of too.

But the meter and the delight of the poem kept me smiling throughout.
03/13/10
Cute poem. Some stanzas flowed better than others, some of the rhyming words seemed a little forced: muscles - bustles, used - mused. But overall, I liked the message.
03/17/10
LOL! What fun... nice work on this, and your last stanza is great!