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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: Grubwort’s House
By Melanie Kerr
03/03/10


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Grubwort woke to find one day
His house had changed in some strange way
Gadzooks! A carpet soft and thick
Of shades that he would never pick

The walls of summer sunshine blue
Had yellow stencilled flowers too
This room so alien and strange
A foul, unpleasant, frightening change

He visited each room and found
So many changes all around
The piercing clean and spotless smell -
It did not suit him very well

His cherished gems he could not find
No prized possessions left behind
His filth, his stench, his rubbish pile
And all those things he thought worthwhile

All was new and spanking clean
Nothing like how things had been
Alarmed, no cause for celebration
Grubwort knew t’was infestation

Invasion of this holy kind
Is something that all demons mind
He trembled in his demon skin
As dreadful thoughts swept over him

His “house”, the stronger man had met
Grubwort’s life - now under threat
His undeniable conviction -
He was facing sure eviction

He’d heard that others just like him
Had found the future very grim
Grubwort squawked a frightened squeak
He shook and shivered, shrilled a shriek

At once propelled beneath the sun
The stronger man the battle won
Before him Grubwort had to kneel
He fled with one last lingering squeal

Now Grubwort’s homeless, please beware
An open window – he’ll be there
To stay forever that’s his plan
To stop him call the stronger man


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Laury Hubrich 03/05/10
Wow! Excellent poem and what a lesson to keep the window shut tight.
Dana McReynolds03/05/10
Loved this poem! Great message.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/05/10
The meter and rhyme is perfect. Great job.
william price03/08/10
Deliverence, or whatever, the strong man got the boot. Good message. Great job. God Bless.
Bryan Ridenour03/08/10
Great poem with a super lesson. Well done!
Gregory Kane03/09/10
A delightful poem. Thoroughly enjoyable. I got halfway through thinking that the source of the poor chap's woes was that he had picked up a wife! Your version was much more satisfying.
One quibble, and I may well be wrong, but I think you need a comma on your final line after "To stop him" Otherwise the natural sense is that Grubwort needs to be stopped from calling the strong man.
Beth LaBuff 03/10/10
I love your whole concept, an "Eek!" from a demon. This is so clever and perfectly written, and what a name "Grubwort!" ...and perfectly tied to Scripture with the "swept clean."
Kate Oliver Webb03/10/10
This one's really special. The mechanics of it seem (to my amateur eye) perfect. But beyond the mechanics, the story, the feel of it, the denouement--well, it's just great! A publishable piece of work if there ever was one....
Joan Campbell03/11/10
Congratulations Melanie! A fun poem with a powerful message. Great combination.
Jackie Wilson03/11/10
Great message, strong rhythm, creative story. Enjoyed this very much! Congratulations!
Ruth Stromquist03/11/10
Loved it! Tremendous message in a fun format. Congratulations.
Connie Dixon03/11/10
Congratulations on this entertaining read. Great flow and message.