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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: Mouse Quake
By Lisa Johnson
02/28/10


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Mouse Quake

Eek… eek… eek…
I heard a squeak,
But, do I have the nerve to peek?

Groan and grouse,
There is a mouse…
There is a mouse inside the house.

Scurry… scurry…
Gray and furry…
Come and get it… hurry… hurry.

I need Mommy,
Daddy, too...
They will know just what to do.

Mouse is running,
Sisters crying…
Here comes Mommy, broom straws flying.

Round and round
The house we pound,
It is enough to shake the ground.

Mouse is trying
To take shelter,
We are running helter skelter.

Mouse and Mommy
In a race…
With kids and Daddy keeping pace.

The mouse is fast…
He sure can scamper,
Dad trips on the laundry hamper.

There it goes…
Right through that door,
And I slip on the kitchen floor.

In the bathroom…
No more cover,
Finally the chase is over.

By the tail…
It’s not that hard,
We put the mouse back in the yard.

Laughing hard…
Tears in our eyes,
We watch the news with great surprise.

Earthquake…
But, we never knew it…
Have to wonder…did we do it?

~ ~ ~ ~

Author’s Note: A true story from my childhood.


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AnneRene' Capp 03/04/10
This is genuinely adorable and put a smile on my face.

I know absolutely nothing about poetry but it flowed very smoothly for me as I read it.

I especially liked that it was a true story!
Genia Gilbert03/04/10
I love this. Covers the topic in great description and homor.
Genia Gilbert03/04/10
Pardon the typo.. That should be humor.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/04/10
This is great. I smiled throughout the whole thing. Very vivid details that rhyme- how wonderful.
Jackie Wilson03/04/10
Simply delightful! The word choices and the rhythm of the poem were so light and airy. It all fit together beautifully.
Beth LaBuff 03/04/10
LOL! Cute story... I could see it all... and how crazy that this actually happened!
Marilyn Schnepp 03/05/10
Really neat! Cute, rapid and to the point, plus ended in success! Great job, delightful read, super Title and brightened up an overcast and dreary day! (*.*)Thanks!
Ruth Stromquist03/05/10
Enjoyed this much. Might make an excellent illustrated children's book, as well as being fun for adults.
Virgil Youngblood 03/05/10
This sure brings back memories and good ones, they are. Good writing.
Brenda Shipman03/07/10
Oh my goodness, I loved every delightful stanza! SO clever, funny and perfect in almost every way. What hilarious illustrations this would make for a children's picture book. The title is great, also.
Joni Andrews 03/11/10
I absolutely adore this. WONDERFUL in every way.
Genia Gilbert03/11/10
Congratulations, friend, on your EC. Great poem, and well deserved.
Carol Penhorwood 03/11/10
Lisa, LOVED this. So funny and clever! Great job!
Beth LaBuff 03/11/10
Hey, congrats on your editor's choice award!
Donna Wolther03/15/10
Wonderful. I especially liked the line where Dad fell on the laundry hamper-- very creative and cute.
Gerald Shuler 03/17/10
I wish I could write like that. Congrats on your EC.