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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Shhh. (02/18/10)

TITLE: Forsaking Sound Addiction
By Linda Germain
02/24/10


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I think that I shall never find
A quiet place to soothe my mind
A tranquil spot on land or sea
That lets me think and be just me


The junk I hear from dusk Ďtil morn
From every iPod, phone, and horn
In air thatís full of blasting noise
Just brings me down and blows my poise


When rocket blare defines a culture
It circles like an evil vulture
Eating up whatís left of peace
There seems no way to make it cease


It clamors, jolts, or clangs a bell
As in and out it weaves its spell
My brain goes numb my nerves get tense
I cannot think, Iíve lost good sense


And all because itís cool to crave
No pause or ban from birth to grave
Of rattles,rock,and endless rolls
That dulls most wit and wounds all souls


I choose to pause and shift my gears
To change my thoughts and save my ears
And maybe as I make this break
My heart can finally hear whatís fake


Discern and know Godís will for me
Escape the worldís dis-harmony
Not tolerate discordant lure
Iíll hum a new song, sweet and pure


I want to tip on quiet toe
To smell and feel the place Iíll go
To find refreshment's lovely hush
Deprived of constant roar, and such


Meantime, if the human race
Would hit delete, clear, or erase
We might find more serenity
But firstÖit has to start with me.

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Marita Vandertogt02/25/10
I don't think we'll ever find that kind of tranquility again...except of course, reading FW entries in silence. This is a good reminder of the noise we're surrounded by and don't even notice anymore.
Charla Diehl 02/26/10
A truly enjoyable poem, nice flow and easy rhyme--and I especially like the last verse. I never fail to find God in quiet, peace-filled nature.
Catrina Bradley 02/26/10
Oh, bravo! Lines like "I want to tip on quiet toe" are pure poetry. (my humble non-official opinion (: ) The meter sounds perfect, and rhyming vulture and culture without forcing it? priceless.
Catrina Bradley 02/26/10
Oh, bravo! Lines like "I want to tip on quiet toe" are pure poetry. (my humble. non-official opinion (: ) The meter sounds perfect, and rhyming vulture and culture without forcing it? Priceless. The message seemed meant for me, and the last line really drives it home. Excellent work.
Ruth Stromquist02/27/10
Loved it! Excellent poetry, with many top notch word choices. Plus a neat message.
Donna Wolther02/27/10
I want to tip on quiet toe
To smell and feel the place Iíll go
I agree, this is great. I do this each morning, but always despair as the day wears on that I can't stay there.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/03/10
This is fantastic. I could only hope to be so talented. Well-done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/04/10
Congratulations on placing in EC with this lovely poem.
Melanie Kerr 03/04/10
So many good lines - which to pick?

"I choose to pause and shift my gears
To change my thoughts and save my ears"

Finding a quiet place is always an act of will. Great poem.
Ifeoma Dennis03/08/10
Really hard for teenagers...the weird thing is that lately it seems it's in the sound of our iPods that we find silence and peace!
Great poem, and had this peaceful "ssh" touch to it.
Ifeoma Dennis03/08/10
Really hard for teenagers...the weird thing is that lately it seems it's in the sound of our iPods that we find silence and peace!
Great poem, and had this peaceful "ssh" touch to it.
Ifeoma Dennis03/08/10
Really hard for teenagers...the weird thing is that lately it seems it's in the sound of our iPods that we find silence and peace!
Great poem, and had this peaceful "ssh" touch to it.