The Official Writing Challenge
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02/27/10
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece... you capture the children's guilt so well, and their individual personalities. This is really good writing ... really really good!!! 5 stars (out of 5 of course)
02/27/10
This was great. It wasn't what I was expecting. I loved the mom busting the kids and them blaming each other, so true to life.
02/27/10
A fun read. Brings back memories. Those are good times.
03/01/10
A lovely story, full of tender observations. Nicely done.
I wasn't sure about "I woke Richard for exactly five minutes before he opened his eyes" as it didn't quite make sense to me. Perhaps it's a local expression or maybe you meant to say "shook"
03/02/10
Charming story all the way through!