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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Shhh. (02/18/10)

TITLE: Finger Dancing
By Jesus Puppy


Finger Dancing

Simple laughter with a few friends,
Gathered there for a meeting.
Little bird hopping, alive and on fire,
Joy without end, what a blessing.
An angel beside me in a family church,
As a little bird sang her praise.
Yet sound was lost in the moment,
The joy was not found in words,
As her silent fingers began dancing.

An angel was singing,
Her voice filled the world,
A little bird on fire.
A sparrow's flight of fancy,
Her heart soaring in a whirl,
Eyes alight with the Son.
As the words touched my heart,
And praise filled the room,
All I saw was her fingers dancing,

Times in life are trials to hear,
Storms rage in the midst of flight,
But the little bird flutters along.
Keeping eyes on the pot of gold,
Her greatest joy in struggles are told,
The moments with her Lord and King.
No rhyme or rhythm in words of praise,
Just emotion in an upraised hand,
As her silent fingers begin dancing.

Thousand years flying over heaven,
Dancing through fields in paradise.
Angels will smile remembering the day,
When the light first shone in her eyes.
As they start to call out for silence,
In the awed presence of the King,
The little bird praises all the more,
With her silent fingers dancing.

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/25/10
Wow what a wonderful way you have with words. I have goosebumps.
Philippa Geaney 02/27/10
Wow how beautiful. You make words dance. Thank you I loved it. I also feel I want to join in with raised hands.
Seema Bagai 03/01/10
You painted a beautiful picture in this piece. I hope you share this with the little bird. ;-)
Tessy Fuller03/02/10
I really enjoyed this - my favorite lines were "Just emotion in an upraised hand,
As her silent fingers begin dancing."
Ruth Stromquist03/02/10
I agree with all above comments. Excellent imagery and word use and message! Just one thing tripped me up a bit in the first stanza. "An angel beside me in a family church,
As a little bird sang her praise." I read that as the little bird singing praise TO THE ANGEL, the 'her' seeming to refer back to the angel in my mind. Which then made them two separate entities and confused me further along in the poem, until I re-read it and figured it out. But it didn't seem to confuse anyone else that way, so maybe it's just me. :-)
Edy T Johnson 03/02/10
Even though I haven't figured out all that you're telling us, here, the word pictures are just beautiful. What came to my mind was an angel of a young girl doing sign language along with a choir-practice group of people singing. Your poetry is a clever way to express the challenge topic, too. How often our attention is snared in the midst of the world's noise and we find silence in focusing on something worth noticing. I relish reading this.
Rachel Phelps03/02/10
Loren T. Lowery03/03/10
In the midst of the storm, eyes focused and following - no distraction but watching the fingers dancing. Beautifully done and expressed!
Sandra Petersen 03/03/10
This was simply amazing! I can't find words to say how beautiful and image-filled your poem is. I am so glad I read it.
Karlene Jacobsen 03/03/10
Absolutely beautiful!
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/04/10
Indeed, I saw your heart shining in this beautiful poem. You made the words dance.