The Official Writing Challenge
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Well-written. At first I was disappointed that I didn't know for sure what his secret was, although I have a couple ideas, then you made me realize it doesn't matter. God knows and loves him. You brought me right into the story. Good job.
02/27/10
What a challenging story! I must admit I was wanting to know the 'secret' (my argument being that it was in the interest of judging right and wrong) but I admit it cannot possibly be my business. WOW great story- even better analogy.
02/28/10
Good writing. Strong message.
The writing was very clever in the way it reverses back to anyone that would make a strong comment on gender issues?
This I know. Pathogen's, birth defects are a result of the fall. God is holy, yet God is love. Does what I say apply? Only God and this writer knows.
03/01/10
Very good way to hint strongly at the "secret" using the verse from Galatians. The narrative was a little slow in places - adding more dialog to "show" instead of tell us about Terry. I enjoyed this though - just the right pace to make me want to keep reading to find out why everyone was whispering.
03/02/10
An intriguing and enigmatic story.
Assuming that your lead character is called Chuck, you seem to have changed from first to third person right at the end