The Official Writing Challenge
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For a minute there I thought your characters had met up with Snoopy and the Red Baron, but you had a better message. Engaging writing.
I'm not a big sci-fi person, but your story entertained me the whole way. I particularly liked the ending.
02/27/10
I found your story intriguing, but I was confused. I would have liked a little more introduction to the characters and their relationships. For instance, why was Xleta the former navigator? And at first it seemed they were in space, but then they were on a planet. Were the prisoners the same race as the pilot? Sometimes it seemed so and others not.

I hope these questions are helpful. I think the story would be fascinating if it were longer.