The Official Writing Challenge
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02/20/10
Good job.
This is excellent in almost every way. Loved the opening with your original poem; that alone is worthy of praise. Then the format of "I am Thomas...I am..." So great! You could've said, "I am Brenda ..." because it felt like you were inside my own head. Such honest, transparent, genuine, WELL-WRITTEN thoughts here. This entry gets two thumbs way up for me! Phew, I am so glad you shared this. :) If this doesn't get up there in the rankings, I do NOT know what the judges are looking for!
Oh, and I LOVED your title, as well. I will never be a track star, either - just another plodding pilgrim! :)
02/22/10
Really honest and heart-felt, touching my own imperfections (such a "nice" word for sins). Thank you for a thought-provoking piece.
02/23/10
I am not a poem lover, but enjoyed the beginning of this piece. Such a good analogy. Well written.