The Official Writing Challenge
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02/20/10
Isn't God good? This cliffhanger kept me reading until the very end. Good job and good writing.
02/21/10
A charming story with a definite sense of Phew. Could certainly imagine the sense of desperate panic in the mother.
I felt that the word 'cognizant'
was a little out of place given the general tone of the rest of this story. But that's only a minor quibble. Let me just go and check MY brake fluid...
02/22/10
Great job taking us on that ride with you!