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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Phew! (02/11/10)

TITLE: Morning dip
By Sharon Kane
02/17/10


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Author's note: This is a true story


A lady went out for a dip in the morning
The sun was up high, the day well past its dawning
Her husband relaxed in the shade of the awning
And oogled her curves with bikini adorning.

She swam past the reed beds with weaver nests clinging
So tightly, and swaying like little bells ringing
With joy at the baby birds' earliest singing
When parents returned with the grubs they were bringing.

She sat on the rocks, heard the fish eagles calling
Out harshly before they would dive, sharply falling
With talons spread, onto the water, then hauling
Their prey to the trees. To eat fresh never palling.

There came a sharp end to her calm lakeside idling:
She caught sight of the form of a crocodile gliding
Across the still water, and skillfully sliding
To snap any creature not suitably hiding.

So there she stood, barefoot, bikini-clad, dripping;
And thanking the Lord she'd avoided a nipping
But wondering how to get home without tripping,
And into Croc's watery lair newly slipping.

Her gallant knight, hearing her shout, began jumbling
Clothes in a knapsack, and then struck out stumbling
Over the rocks, to where she remained, mumbling
Praises to keep her from utterly crumbling.

Thus she returned to where children were wating
To hear she was done with her crocodile baiting.
They gave her new sport a most dangerous rating
Then invented a game: 'Mr. Croc's salivating!'



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Laury Hubrich 02/19/10
Oh, I thought it was going to be romantic and then a crocodile got involved. lol. Very cute poem. And it's true? Yikes!
Noel Mitaxa 02/19/10
Is it really true - or just an alli-gation?
Amazing and very clever of you to pen a poem about such a scary event. Does this mean there is 'verse' to come?
Barbara Lynn Culler02/21/10
i enjoyed this story, especially the way you did the -ing endings. I did not know that was allowed!
Mariane Holbrook02/22/10
This is a terrific entry! I found myself tapping in the desk while reading it! Kudos!
Beautiful !
Jackie Wilson02/22/10
I loved knowing this was true. What a fun poem! Thanks!
Beth LaBuff 02/24/10
Oh wow! What a fright that must have been! My favorite lines, in your fun poem, "Across the still water, and skillfully sliding -- To snap any creature not suitably hiding." The kids invention of a game about "Mr. Croc Salivating" made me smile!
Yvonne Blake 02/24/10
Great poem!
Lollie Hofer 02/24/10
This sent chills up and down my spine. One reason is because, well, it is a true story has to do with crocs. The second is because it is very well-written and fun to read. Loved the description of her in her bikini.