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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Phew! (02/11/10)

TITLE: Am I Welcome At Walmart?
By Carol Penhorwood


Out of everything, we just had to get to the store. So we packed up our family of six and headed to Walmart. Patrick took Madison, 8, and Eli, 3, and headed for the Electronics Department. I placed 18 month old Noah in the cart but Olivia, ever helpful at the age of 6, insisted on pushing the cart down those grocery aisles.

Knowing Noah's hands would be reaching for everything in sight, I felt it would be best to instruct Olivia to roll the cart down the center of each aisle. That worked for awhile. But there wasn't much excitement in that, I guess, and soon Olivia was jerking the cart back and forth hitting as many other carts as she could.

As we were turning the aisle, another cart was coming at us with a tall skinny box, and, sure enough, Olivia was right on target. Whack! The skinny box went flying and hit goods on the top shelves causing a domino effect with boxes tumbling everywhere for which we had to get help, apologizing as I went.

On to the next aisle, still fuming. But I put the cart in the middle of the aisle so Noah couldn't reach anything. But along came another customer, so I had to move the cart off to the side so the customer could pass, not noticing that Noah had reached for three or four tuna cans, and suddenly they were on the floor as fast as he could throw them. I picked them up, ready to blow a gasket with both children.

In the next aisle, moving the cart to the side for yet another customer, trying to watch Noah out of the corner of my eye, I saw him pick up a glass jar of applesauce and, I swear, in slow motion that jar of applesauce hit the floor and shattered.

“Can I get you some help?” offered a sympathetic customer. “But I don't know where anyone is.”

I knew where someone was. They were two aisles over cleaning up from the LAST mess my kids made. But I wasn't about to tell her that.

By this time, I'm on my cell phone calling my husband out of Electronics to come and help me. He took the kids to the car. I got just the very basics we needed and scurried out of that store.


Home at last.

I'm not going back to Walmart ever again...well, at least not until next week.

A true story as told to me by my daughter, Amy.

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Dana McReynolds02/18/10
Love the title and the last line!
Noel Mitaxa 02/19/10
So insanity is hereditary - you get it from your kids! Loved this energetic profile of life with all our bundles of joy. Loved the ending too.
Gregory Kane02/21/10
Sounds to me like Patrick got the better deal
Carole Robishaw 02/22/10
Maybe you can find another Walmart and rotate? I loved this, I know several families who experience this regularly. Good Job!
Jackie Wilson02/23/10
Boy, can I ever relate to this story! A fun read! Thanks!
Beth LaBuff 02/23/10
oh funny! I could see everything you described! I enjoyed this, from the title to the end!
Sarah Elisabeth 02/24/10
hehe, what handfuls!

On the opening sentence "out of everything" made me think along the lines of "of all things."

Enjoyable read for sure!
Mariane Holbrook 02/24/10
What a great story and every mother and grandmother and even aunts and cousins can relate to it. Are kids the greatest little treasures on earth or what? Great story, my friend!! Big time kudos to you!!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/24/10
A nice story about how tough it is to shop with little ones.
Lollie Hofer02/24/10
Reminds me of a time I took two of my grandchildren to Walgreens. I'm surprised they never put up a wanted poster of me. Okay, there were some grammar errors here and there cuz' you were in a hurry to get it submitted before the deadline. Even so, it was still a fun story to read. And all mothers can relate. I'm glad you got it in before the deadline.
Ernie Earth05/12/10
I read the beginning of your story in Jan's lesson. It made me laugh so much that I had to read the whole thing. I first looked in masters but I found you in level 3. I though your story was very well written, and if I had come across it in a magazine, I would have felt that the time it took to read it was well spent. Good Job.