The Official Writing Challenge
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02/12/10
Loved your opening descriptions, particularly your simile about the foul ball! I could perfectly picture the scene. I like Sally's focus on others to make her point. The line that left me hanging? The last one--it jarred somehow after the previous one--I think it's because I wanted more to the story...word limits! :-)
02/14/10
Excellent. I was right there. And such a good message. What a great "ooh" moment.
02/18/10
Congrats on placing in this tough field, Connie!