The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this but had to re-read the first paragraphs twice (because the preceeding entry was about an elderly woman who'd fallen-- had my own, Ohhh moment figuring it out). I like the perspective and the lesson. And, I love the expressions that seem to come from the other side of the big pond :) I'd watch paragraph sizes, maybe a little more variation, but all in all, I liked it.
02/13/10
Very cute and creative. I could see the little one's struggle. Great comparison to our struggles as well. I noticed an overuse of the word "sometimes" and agree with previous comment on paragraph size.
I loved all the fun words in this entry: nappy, pilchers, gooby grin, and of course, the "oh doonk!" was so descriptive of the falling down. Good transition from the toddler's struggles to our own with the sentence, "Sometimes we do that, though." Definitely needs spacing between the paragraphs. And I do hope your "oh doonk" month has been enriched with lots of those comforting friends & loved ones! :)
02/16/10
With some polishing this can be a very good entry.