The Official Writing Challenge
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02/13/10
You started out strong and your writing is good, but you led me to believe that this story was going to be about a lonely woman, with neighbors who ignore her and I was disappointed at the end.
02/14/10
I feel like this has lots of potential, but needs to be developed more. It seemed to just end abruptly, leaving the reader to wonder what the author was trying to communicate. Do keep writing, though; I see descriptive strengths in this story.
02/16/10
Your title is exactly right, "what happen" to the rest of the story. It's as thought you had this part written and something "happen" to prevent you from finishing the story, so you submitted what you had. I thought the start was very good, but very disappointed that you did not finish.