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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Façade of Righteousness
By Benjamin Graber
02/05/10


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What if you spent your life
Chasing a façade?

What if all your passion
Is just pretty wrapping
Over an ugly lie?

What if all you believed
Was just a castle
Of fairy tales
Built to make yourself look good?

And when you thought
You were nearer God
Than all the world—
It was at that moment
You were closest to Hell?


I had memorized my Bible
From cover
To cover,
And knew it better
Than my own heart…

I was the best
In all the world:
More holy than David,
More righteous than Noah,
More passionate than Moses…


With fire and brimstone
I spent my life fighting
The greatest lie from the pits of Hell:
The power of a false prophet
Who broke the Bible,
And taught others to do so as well…

We had the words of God!
Those who break
From the strain
Must be broken—
Must die!

As the shepherd of the flock
It was my duty
To do the breaking:
To smash the lies
To shatter the dreams
To crush the hopes,
All for the will of God,
To protect the sheep.


And with that passion
Burning in my heart
I took the road
To Damascus.

It was on the way
The façade was revealed,
The lie was unwrapped,
The fairy tales came tumbling down,
And I saw
Just how close I was to Hell…

“Oh!”
“It’s you!!!”


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Gina Fifo02/13/10
Wow . . . this is beautifully written. Very descriptive. Great job.
The Masked Truelovers02/14/10
At first I thought it was a slap on the wrist to holier than thou Christians who forget that they too are just sinners saved by grace. ...sharp way of getting inside of Paul's mind. I didn't get it until the end.
Sharon Kane02/16/10
Very clever and well written. I also didn't see it was Paul till you mentioned Damascus, then I re-read it and it all fit. A very clever technique to make us examine our own hearts first!
Personally I think it would have been more powerful without the 'Oh, It's you' at the end.
Sarah Elisabeth 02/18/10
Hey Benjamin, congrats on placing 13th in the Level 3 with this entry! There are so many talented writers here, so great job! If you haven't already, be sure to check out the Highest Rankings on the boards:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=28809