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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Postcards (08/29/05)

TITLE: A Postcard From Heaven's Haven
By Robin McGowan
08/31/05


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“A Postcard from Heaven’s Haven”

Yesterday, I received a postcard in the mail from a friend of mine who is lucky enough to be a travel agent. This friend travels the world. I am always ecstatic to receive postcards. Usually when I receive a postcard, I quickly read the bottom of the card to see whom it is from before reading it. On this particular day, I was intrigued to just keep reading the postcard, knowing soon enough I would find out whom it was from.
It read:

Dear Robin:

The weather is beautiful here! The sky is always blue with white and big pillow-like clouds. The scenery is breathtaking. The flowers are very exotic and vivid in color. Every street in the city is picturesque, while every home has beautiful window boxes of flowers. Lush green landscapes adorn lovely cottages. The people here are the friendliest people that I have ever met. They are also quite helpful and always want to be of service. Everyone smiles and greets you. Each day I feel excited to be here, and each day here is better than the one before.

Meanwhile, I was visiting one particular street known by all tourists for its charm and beauty. The sun cascaded on the street as if it were a street of Gold. The colors were golden and magnificent. I came to this one particular old but restored Mansion called: “Heaven’s Haven” and decided to go in. On the door, there was a note that the tour was due to start in one hour. Tired but happy, I sat down on the bench outside collecting my thoughts. I then pulled out of my back pocket my travel book and began to line up the days activities. Just then, many people started to arrive for the tour. As I chatted with others, I found out the tour was free!
I thought free! Nothing is ever free. As we lined up to greet the tour guide, the kindest man with the most gentle and unassuming character approached us. He said: “Hello, My name is JC, Jr. and I will be your tour guide.”

Pointedly, He said: “You are about to see the most beautiful rooms in the world. Everyone you will meet here is exceptional, and there is a peace and tranquility here, like none you have ever experienced before.” As we started to go in and out of the rooms, I noticed that there were many pictures with beautiful and tranquil scenery. I also noticed at the bottom of the pictures, there were elegant words written. One picture read: "No eye has seen, no ear has heard, no mind has conceived what God has prepared for those who love him." 1 Corinthians 2:9 NIV. I mumbled to myself, won’t all people need eternity after this life?

As we toured the lovely mansion, JC Jr. said: “Folks, you have just seen a glimpse of what is in store for those who visit the town of Heaven. There are many mansions in Heaven that you may visit. You also may stay there if you choose too. And by the way, the town of Heaven is in the next city over. Get your tickets early if you plan to go. And remember, please pass this message on to others when you get home and tell them to talk to their travel agent, so that they too can experience the beauty that you have just seen. If any of you are interested, I can provide you with that information. I have many names of travel agents throughout various cities. I would be happy to acquaint you with these contacts. As always, thanks for coming folks!”

Well Robin, I thought I would pass this message on to you and tell you about the beautiful experience that I have had when meeting everyone at Heaven’s Haven. It truly is a spectacular place! I also have been to the town of Heaven and have many friends there, and some in very high places. If you decide to come to either location, feel free to contact me. After all, I am one of the tour guides best agents.


Your friend,
The Holy Spirit


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dub W09/05/05
Interesting use of story telling, although that is a very long postcard. Thanks for posting.
Allison Lee09/06/05
A cute idea...In your description of the "white and big pillow-like clouds," it might sound better to say "big and white." I believe, grammatically, adjectives should be size first, then color. The introductory paragraph could have been shorter and gotten to the point more quickly. A unique and creative idea!
Jan Ackerson 09/10/05
I like this piece very much. I think it would be even more effective if it just began "Dear Robin..." without the introductory paragraph. Delightful descriptions!