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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Postcards (08/29/05)

TITLE: A Couple’s Heavenly Love
By sharmila sanka
08/31/05


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It was May 16th and Rosie was in the Philips Park thinking of her husband. She remembered how her first sweet day started and how many turns that day led to in her life.

One day Tim approached Rosie who was alone in her class - ‘am I privileged to have a coffee with this beautiful lady?’ She mumbled, ‘I’m busy right now.’ Tim’s sparkling eyes immediately became small. Her heart craved for him at once but she never believed in ‘Love at first sight.’

‘I am not a flirt who asks everyone for a coffee.’ Tim said.

Rosie walked with Tim to the canteen. They had a nice chit chat.

‘Let’s go now’ Rosie said.

‘Wait for a minute’, said Tim. He took a beautiful pink rose in his hand and said,
‘Can I dare to ask this lady if she can be a part of my life?’

Astonished Rosie said, ‘this is our first meeting. How can we be sure we can live our lives together happily basing on just one happy get together?’

Tim said, ‘well, my heart says so. I believe in it.’

‘Well, if my heart says ‘NO’?’ Rosie asked.

‘A heart filled with true love is capable of winning a doubtful heart.’ Tim responded.

Rosie said, ‘Let us not meet for few days and see if we can stay without thinking of each other. Only then we can be sure we are in need of each other for love’s sake.’

They decided to meet in Philips Park on 16th of May.

Days were passing on like years and both their hearts were beating only for each other. Without their beloved, the whole world seemed to be empty for each other. Whom ever they saw, their beloved was seen in them.

It was 16th May. The time had come to meet each other. Lo, Rosie was amazed to see Tim already in the dream land taking few steps only to hug her.

“Rosie, let my heart speak to your heart if you still feel that our love is infatuation. Every moment I lived in your thoughts. Will you marry me Rosie?”

Then Rosie took a small piece of paper from her purse and gave it to Tim.

Tim’s hands started to shiver as he opened the letter. It read

‘Tim,
YOU+ME= WE
1+1 is not 2 BUT 1.
We have two hearts but one heart beat, two minds but one thought.
LET’S LIVE AS ONE.’ - Rosie

Tim knelt down said,

‘Rosie, I bow to the love residing in your heart.’
Rosie said,
‘Honey, may I never cheat those eyes which love my heart deeply. Let’s tread on the path of trust.’

Rosie and Tim hugged each other’s hearts rather than lips.

It was their wedding day and the church was decorated with festoons of smiles of their friends. There were not people wearing suits and costly apparel but people in need of food and love. The poor people in the town were invited for their marriage to fill their stomachs. As the ceremony ended, they admired the couple for their kind hearts to think of the hungry people.

Years passed on as Tim and Rosie together sojourned the ocean of life rowing with the two oars of happiness and sorrow. No being’s life is a garden of smiling flowers. The same is the situation with Tim and Rosie too.

One morning, the Sun arose as usual. But the day was not as sweet as usual. When Tim offered her coffee, Rosie was irritated. Tim was shocked. He gave her a morning hug as usual and she asked him not to touch her.

Days passed on this way. Tim came to a conclusion that she might have fallen in love with someone. He fearfully lay back to sleep.

Tim woke up only to see Rosie’s bed empty in the other room. He heard a knock on the door. He opened and found Mary with a post card.

‘I am supposed to hand this over to you tomorrow but my heart didn’t let me do that to you. Read this’ and hurriedly she went away.

“Honey, don’t think negative about my intolerable behavior. My love for you is as deep as the mighty ocean. I am unfortunate to be unable to lead the remaining life with you. God gave me a heart to love you but not a healthy heart. Doctor said I have a heart disease and death is approaching me. I know you will not be in a condition to face my death? You cannot live happily if I don’t hate you. I hated you only to see you hate me. Tomorrow might be my last day and the moment the sun sets, my life ends. I cannot die peacefully having you at my side. So I had to do hate you to let you live a normal life after my death.

Can you forgive me? Promise me you will re-marry and make yourself happy. I will be awaiting you at the edge of the heaven. There is no soul more handsome than your loving heart. I bow to the same kind and loving heart.”
–A soul immersed in Tim’s Love
Rosie

Tim’s eyes were bedewed with tears. He experienced a lifelong sorrow in few moments. He didn’t know where Rosie would be at that morning hour.

Rosie in the Philips Park realized that death was approaching her and she desperately wanted to see Tim for the last time. She prayed thus-‘Dear God, let your grace be Tim’s home.’
Rosie began to cry piercingly and stopped at the touch of a hand on her shoulder. It was no other than Tim who very well knew Rosie would be in the memorable Philips park as it was the first place they took vows for life.’

Rosie burst out in tears and so was Tim. For the last time, their eyes and hearts hugged each other. Tim could feel Rosie’s head drooping down as Rosie felt Tim’s head falling down too weightlessly as he said,
‘That which has birth but no death is Eternity and that is named true Love. Ours is true eternal Love which will help us live our lives together in heaven.’

Their lips extended to greet each other with satisfaction as they fell down to earth with no life.

There was absolute silence as if the trees, flowers and the birds were mourning their death at that morning hour.


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dub W09/05/05
Work on beats rather than affirmations, read the essay out loud and you discover ways to smooth out the choppy description and dialog. Keep working at it and you will arrive, the story as great potential.
Pat Guy 09/05/05
I agree with dub - it has great potential! Almost like a fable of love.
Jan Ackerson 09/10/05
Who's Mary?

Sweet story, the dialog needs work to be a little bit more realistic. But it's nice to read about that kind of love.
sharmila sanka09/15/05
Actually this story was very lengthy but due to the word limit, I had to delete many of the dialogues. I am so sorry for the ambiguity regarding the character Mary. She was Rosie's friend.