The Official Writing Challenge
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Talk about a word in due season - this was it for me! I definitely needed to hear this today and the way you phrased it in poetic form, made the "beast" not so formidable.
I love how you made grr into something that is alive. You demonstrated beautifuly what real anger is and how it can take over our lives. But the last line is a life saver- literally.

The only thing I might consider changing is this line:

And if the Grrr is challenged says
Twas only harmless fun

to something like this:

If the Grr is challenged he says...

Just taking out the word and, then inserting the word he seems to flow better to my ear.

But I think it is a beautiful poem and you do a great job with rhythm and meter.

Thank you for sharing a lovely part of your heart.
Great flow, all the way through. What a great example of the human heart without the influence of the Man from Galilee.
02/10/10
Love, love this! It's me you're talking about, right?
So well written, easy to follow, says so much with so few words. Poetically correct. Top drawer!

Mona
02/11/10
Such an accurate and concise portrayal of what we all know of ourselves on the inside, and the damage that can arise if the trigrrr is squeezed.