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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grrr! (01/28/10)

TITLE: The Grrr Inside of Me
By Melanie Kerr
02/03/10


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The Grrr that lives inside me is
A nasty, horrid beast
And all it takes is anger for
The Grrr to be released

Sometimes the Grrr is sleeping
But then one day he wakes
A pushchair banged against the legs
Is sometimes all it takes

At once the Grrr is hissing
He snarls and sometimes snaps
And if he gets to close to you
He reaches out and slaps

The Grrr has such a vast array
Of words hes dipped in rage
He daubs it on a persons heart
Like words upon a page

Hes very rarely sorry
For anything hes done
And if the Grrr is challenged says
Twas only harmless fun

The Grrr is always ready
Whatever time or place
To be there in an instance
And show his ugly face

I wish that someone stronger than
The Grrr would rescue me
Ive heard that there is such a man
The man from Galilee


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Loren T. Lowery02/09/10
Talk about a word in due season - this was it for me! I definitely needed to hear this today and the way you phrased it in poetic form, made the "beast" not so formidable.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/09/10
I love how you made grr into something that is alive. You demonstrated beautifuly what real anger is and how it can take over our lives. But the last line is a life saver- literally.

The only thing I might consider changing is this line:

And if the Grrr is challenged says
Twas only harmless fun

to something like this:

If the Grr is challenged he says...

Just taking out the word and, then inserting the word he seems to flow better to my ear.

But I think it is a beautiful poem and you do a great job with rhythm and meter.

Thank you for sharing a lovely part of your heart.
Lyn Churchyard02/09/10
Great flow, all the way through. What a great example of the human heart without the influence of the Man from Galilee.
Mona Purvis02/10/10
Love, love this! It's me you're talking about, right?
So well written, easy to follow, says so much with so few words. Poetically correct. Top drawer!

Mona
Noel Mitaxa 02/11/10
Such an accurate and concise portrayal of what we all know of ourselves on the inside, and the damage that can arise if the trigrrr is squeezed.