The Official Writing Challenge
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02/04/10
So glad I wasn't drinking something when I started reading this or else my computer would be toast. I don't know why, but the man purse thing just cracked me up--I loved that it showed up a couple times in the story. Your dialogue is so authentic...I felt like I was eaves dropping on the whole thing. Very funny.
Super fun and creative entry. The "murse" cracked me up as well. Great piece!
What a gift you have! Your plot, characters, dialogue, and humor are the "best."
Outstanding. What a fun read.
02/08/10
I was absolutely hooked by the first paragraph. The voice was so, SO authentic, and the murse references had me in stitches. I also loved that you were on topic, without clobbering me with it. Delightfully entertaining with outstanding comedic timing.
Very interesting topic. I giggled here and there. Good job.
02/09/10
I could sense the small-town, country feel of this story. I guess I'm not sure about the "fluff" effect but I really enjoyed this. Great writing.
02/09/10
I just so love Widow Kemp. My kind of gal. Decision maker. Takes the stage without any effort.
Loved this wonderful, well-written and on topic entry.
Mona
02/09/10
I'm going to be laughing at this one the rest of the day! Wonderful characters, wonderful story... hilarious! (Murse... I'll have to remember that...:)
If nothing else, this substantiates what I've always thought about a woman's memory - it's inexhaustible : ) Great take on the theme and the way you were able to round out so many colorful characters in such a short span of words is truly remarkable. Hope the Dr. and the widow have a great time together - satchel not withstanding.
LOL I love the whole manbag/purse/murse thing. Each couple trying to goad the widow into bidding for their man to win the bet. A very visual story and well written as always.
02/09/10
Haha, this was good! Loved the set up and the bantering behind the widow.

Maybe it's just me, but the italics were a bit distracting from the fanstastic dialogue.

Amazing job as always!!!
02/09/10
A classic and hilarious piece! What an amusing way of describing a purse-murse-satchel-bag. This is a sure way of driving someone's patience to the point of annoyance! I like the part when Mrs Kemp said, "Can we shut up about the doctor's bag already?" That's a great way of ending any unfruitful chatter!
02/09/10
I could visualize the whole hilarious story, from the tra-la-la word pronunciations to the "murse". This fluff is heavy on the humor! LOVE it!
Very good writing. It's so interesting that I had to keep going back about to 'who' said 'what'... too many characters. Maybe it's only me, I could not understand some expressions said in the chatter. But I honestly enjoyed the story very much on how you've written it so well. You are a gifted master-writer.

02/10/10
Delightful story, rich dialog, wonderful writing, as always!
02/11/10
Very pictorial writing, in the colors, the humour, the conversations and the emotions. My 'purse'onal opinion is that it should score well.
02/11/10
Looks like the judges agree with the comments all the way to EC! well deserved.

Mona
02/11/10
Three weeks in a row! Wow! I'm glad this well-crafted entertaining story made the EC list! Super Congrats, Lisa!
02/11/10
My favorite part? When Elsie put her hands behind her back so her husband had to carry the murse. What a gift to put us right there envisioning the whole scenario! I enjoyed being there immensely!
02/11/10
Lisa,

I enjoyed this very much... I could picture the whole episode in my mind's eye... I love your talent at putting humor into your writing. Congrats on doing do well in the judging.

Lisa J.
02/11/10
Still laughing, Lisa! Love this story--congratulations!
Fun read. Lots of great dialogue! Congratulations on EC!
I'm just getting last week's EC's read. What a fun entry. The doctor and the widow came alive with your excellent characterizations. Congratulations on your EC!