The Official Writing Challenge
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This story was hard to follow. Who were Jason and Jennifer and what is their relationship to Linda and the author or narrator? And where does the mother come in? Is Linda the mother?
02/07/10
Ditto to the previous commenter, also a missplaced comma or two. Needs a lot of work, keep practicing and maybe get someone to proofread for you before submitting.