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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grrr! (01/28/10)

TITLE: Plumbing the Depths of Her Love
By Lyn Churchyard
01/31/10


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Beth looked up from her laptop. “What is he doing?”

The noise—make that racket—coming from the kitchen was punctuated by exasperated bellowing.

“Grrr!”

BANG…

CRASH…

“GET—IN—THERE—BLAST YOU”

CRASH…THUNK…

“Grrr!”

CLANG…

“GRRRR…”

THUD… CLUNK…

“YOU—ROTTEN”

A medium-sized wrench flew past Beth as she appeared in the doorway, missing her by inches. “Alistair, what on earth are you doing?”

Alistair jerked his head up at the sound of her voice. CRACK! “Yeowch!” he stood up rubbing the back of his head. “I’m trying to fix the disposal unit.” He said, aiming a kick at his toolbox. The toolbox, as is the nature of toolboxes, resisted his futile attempt to send it to the naughty corner.

Beth tried to stifle the laugh that threatened to bubble over as Alistair clutched his foot and hopped around the floor.

“Honey, calm down.”

Her husband stopped mid hop to glare at her, “Calm down? Calm down? That… that thing... grrr…” he spluttered, spinning around to point an accusing finger at he sink, “is trying to kill me!”

“Grrr, grrr, grrr.” a black and white blur, in the form of Jasper, their mixed-breed retriever, shot through the back door to join in the fun. He bounced up and down, his tail wagging furiously as he leapt on Alistair thinking this was some glorious game.

“Grrrr!” snarled Alistair, “Get down you stupid dog!”

“Grrr… grrr,” agreed Jasper, becoming more excited.

Alistair tried to back away from their overexcited pet and found the only patch of water on the floor. Wind-milling his arms furiously, his feet shot out from under him and he found himself flat on his back.

His wife gripped the doorframe, and tears rolled down her cheeks as she doubled up, hooting with laughter as Jasper pawed Alistair, wanting to continue the game.

Struggling to his feet, Alistair managed to shoo their pet out the back door before turning to give his wife a look of reproach. “I’m glad you find this so amusing.”

“Would it help if I said ‘I’m sorry’?”

“It might, it might.” Alistair picked up a three-inch piece of pipe and lobbed it towards the sink.

CRASH… tinkle and two Royal Doulton statues toppled over, each shattering into a dozen pieces.

For the space of a dozen heartbeats, there was silence while they both stared at the porcelain fragments.

“Oh honey, I am so sorry!” Alistair stared at his wife aghast, the statues had been a first anniversary present from him ten years ago, and she treasured them.

Beth reached up and took his face between her hands. “Mr. Johnson, those statues were precious to me because you gave them to me. You, however, are much more precious to me than a thousand pieces of fancy porcelain.”

A low growl emanated from deep within Alistair’s chest, and he pulled her into his arms. “Is it any wonder I love you as much as I do, Mrs. Johnson?”

Behind them the sink emitted its own response, Grrr—gurgle—shudder—ping and a stream of water shot towards the ceiling. Alistair felt his wife’s shoulders begin to shake, and his laughter instantly joined hers.

“Shall I call the plumber?” Beth asked, looking at the water lapping at their feet.

“Grrreat idea,” said Alistair, as his lips met hers.


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Lizzy Ainsworth02/04/10
Very amusing and good spin on Grr.
I thought perhaps there should have been a little more conflict over the statue, perhaps internal.
It seemed to imply that the statue was precious to her, however her response, though it was good, did not imply that she cared about the statue anymore. Perhaps a little more drama here.
Love how the dog got involved
Lisha Hunnicutt02/06/10
I loved this story. It was lighhearted and comical. I disagree with the previous comment regarding the statues. One time I took a small chunk out of the front bumper of my husband's beloved Mustang. His response to me was, "You're more important than the bumper." That has hung with me for years because at a time when he could've really taken it out on me, he responded in love. So, I liked the fact that Beth realized that her husband's value was more important than statues that can be replaced.
c clemons02/07/10
I liked the story and the title, good job.
Ruth Brown 02/07/10
One of the best life comedy pieces I have ever read here. The plus was the great message.
Perfect title as well.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/09/10
You made me smile. I enjoyed the description of the dog immensely. How nice to have a relationship filled with that kind of love.
Kate Oliver Webb02/09/10
Very well done! Loved the story, the people, the dog, and the disposal! Thanks for an entertaining read (and the punny title).
Mona Purvis02/09/10
Lots of fun here! Is there anything more amusing than our hubby's efforts to repair something he knows nothing about? Mine is so like your character.

Mona
Loren T. Lowery02/09/10
This is so amusing and one I can too easily identify with. I'm not so sure I could have kept my patience and piece of mind as your characters were able to do. They've set a good example of keeping things in perspective.
Carol Slider 02/09/10
Oh, great story! I hope I would be as nice as Beth about an "accident" like this. Something to strive for, certainly! Loved the humorous touches, too. Well done.
Sarah Elisabeth 02/09/10
Good one! Grrreat title and grrreat ending! :-D
Barbara Lynn Culler02/10/10
This is so realistic! Great story.
Carol Penhorwood 02/10/10
Loved this story with the creative title. Not everyone can forgive so easily, but definitely the way it should be.
Brenda Shipman 02/10/10
So cute - loved it! And, like the others, I think the title is great!
Carol Penhorwood 02/12/10
Congratulations on placing in your level! Have you checked out the Challenge Forums?