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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Grrr! (01/28/10)

TITLE: MISCHIEF!
By Jackie Wilson
01/30/10


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No moon tonight, it’s black as soot;
I fear there’s mischief now afoot.
To flee the monster in my bed,
Quick!, through forest gloom I tread.

With no concern, I’d snuggled down,
Was drifting, dreaming, sleeping sound,
And then, a thump!, the stink of fur,
The gleam of teeth, a deep, rough “grrrr”.

Before my mouth could form a cry
Across the room my feet did fly
And through the open window sail,
Tearing my nightgown on a nail!

Stumbling, groping in the dark,
I feel my way by trees’ rough bark.
No looking back! My eyes might see
The unimaginable chasing me!

Damp tentacles of ghostly air
Brush soft against my tumbling hair.
A swish of grass, a snap of twig –
I think it’s following me – something BIG!

So now I run, barefoot and cold,
And hope I live to see this told…...

Strength is fading,

Heartbeat pounds,

Hot breath hits me,

Terror sounds...

GRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!

I flail, I fight, I fling my fist!
The monster grabs me by the wrist!
And then I hear, “Stop hitting, Sis!”

Grrrrrrr….

He hasn’t heard the end of this!


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Philippa Geaney 02/06/10
That is marvellous!!! Very clever.Lots of tension, lots of fun. I think it is going to do well.
c clemons02/07/10
Not bad and you definitely got the grrr! in.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/07/10
Great twist, a pesky brother was the last thing I expected as a monster.
Ruth Brown 02/07/10
A perfect title. I admire poets, and you're really good.
Joan Campbell02/09/10
I so enjoyed reading this poem. Your rythm has a fun, light feel and yet your word choice still creates tension - a great combination! Congrats on an excellent submission.
The Masked Truelovers02/09/10
very good poetry rythem that kept the story moving with ease.
Mona Purvis02/09/10
Perfect in so many ways. I love reading poetry, but so often it isn't all that interesting. This is such a well-told story in poetic splendor.
Hope to see it as a winner.

Mona
Carol Slider 02/09/10
A fun poem with a great ending! Good job.
Loren T. Lowery02/09/10
Simply captivating in its simplicity, Well, well done. Bravo!
Lyn Churchyard02/09/10
The flow was great, making it the sort of poem you can read aloud with ease. I could see the trees and feel her panic as she runs. Something tells me her brother is indeed going to be very sorry.
Well done, I love this.
Scarlett Farr 02/09/10
Very visual and scary! Loved the twist at the end.
Brenda Shipman02/10/10
What a fun poem! Terrific use of "grrr". I had a similar experience with my brother while in my teens, and have never let him forget it!
Brenda Shipman02/11/10
Congratulations on your 1st Place win in Advanced and 3rd in Editor's Choice!! Well-deserved!! Yay!
Bryan Rudolph02/11/10
Wow . . . my, what ride . . . my childhood fears, front and centre again, . . . and then that super sweet twist, at the end . . . grrrr . . . I wish for more!

Congratulations, Jackie, on your first place win; thank you for such an enjoyable read.

Bryan.
Mona Purvis02/11/10
No question that this one belongs at top! Congrats!

Mona
Sarah Elisabeth 02/11/10
Congrats on your first place win!
Carol Slider 02/11/10
Congratulations on your EC!! This is great fun to read!
Carol Penhorwood 02/12/10
Impressive and certainly deserving of your placement!

Have you checked out the Challenge Forums?
Charla Diehl 02/13/10
This poem has all the right elements to keep the reader reading with interest. Congratulations on both wins/placements. Loved the surprise ending.
Sharlyn Guthrie02/16/10
Fun poem! Congratulations on your EC!
Lisa Johnson 02/22/10
Very nicely done. I can easily tell how this poem did so well in both level and editor's choice. Congrats.
Thyanks by te way for your kind words about my "Phew!" entry.