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Good writing. Drew me in. But I didn't get it.
Nice piece, I think prince charming was Jesus. Very inventive.
I think during the rewrite process you might have deleted some parts. I don't see the topic at all and the story really did not make sense. Sorry :(. Keep writing.
I am not sure how many words you used or perhaps in the copy and paste the Grr got left behind. It was shaping up to be a wonderful story.
I see "Grrr" written between the lines in your first paragraph. You are annoyed and agitated! Result: "Grrr!"
Love the theme, receiving the Lord's lavish love! We forget how very much he loves us!
You used good descriptions. After your initial "grrr" at the good fortune of the person in the limo, I thought you were dreaming you found your prince charming. In the end, I interpreted your story as a young Christian who suddenly died and was taken by Jesus to one of many mansions.