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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Huh? (01/21/10)

TITLE: our cottage fire
By Jim McWhinnie


our cottage fire,
the crackling fire, the cuddling fire,
the farewell gift of the old oak who finally fell,
in the October of this realm,
this hearth where love is warmed
‘neath handmade quilts and cozied honey tea,
beside our purring, softly purring cat,
we dream our mellow dreams,
of what has been and what will be,
in the flickering shadows of aging flames,
my love and me,
together here,
in the soft, soft light of our cottage fire.

our cottage fire,
the choir within her sings to us in many whispered voices,
lush lullabies to lull the worried thought,
soft serenades to soothe the wearied heart,
we listen,
we listen,
to hear once more, the tenderness
that melts young loves into works of art,
as candles melt as wicks are burned,
giving warmth to cold and light to dark.
my love and me,
together here,
in the soft, soft light of our cottage fire.

our cottage fire,
she ushers into a far and distant world,
where we are near,
oh, so very near,
where in a moment,
a deeper moment comes to be,
my love’s blue and smoky eyes, they do ask,
“Do you love me, old man?”
my soul stumbles with what to say,
I try to bring some words to life,
wanting so to do,
in this low and luscious lover’s light,
but all that sounds is my humble, “huh”,
she smiles, she pats my cheek,
she understands, it is enough,
and we return to our cottage fire,
my love and me,
together here,
slumbering through the night
in the soft, soft light of our cottage fire.

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Brenda Shipman 01/28/10
This is so lovely. I felt transported to a moment of enduring love and comfortable companionship. Vivid description, heartfelt slice of life. Tremendous!
Carol Penhorwood 01/28/10
A man of few words, huh?
Lollie Hofer 01/29/10
Beautiful! I like the gentle flow of the poem. Your descriptive words helped me to see what you wanted to convey.
Bryan Ridenour02/01/10
Beautiful tribute to enduring love. Well done!
Joy Faire Stewart02/01/10
Love this...had to read a second time. Beatifully written!
Sarah Elisabeth 02/01/10
awww, this warmed my heart! I'm no judge of poetry, but I loved the flow and feel of this. Beautiful scene
Karen Pourbabaee 02/01/10
I immediately pictured one of Thomas Kinkade's paintings...all those little cottages in the woods with soft light from the windows and smoke coming from the chimneys...beautiful words, beautiful portrait!
Jackie Wilson02/01/10
How very sweet and romantic. Lovely gentle words throughout. Thanks.
Celeste Ammirata02/01/10
What a beautiful, romantic poem. I felt a quietness in my heart as I read it. Well Done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/01/10
You've got this "free verse" thing down down pat. I love your beautiful words and the tenderness in your words for your beloved.
Beth LaBuff 02/01/10
No words necessary when his life "says it all." I enjoyed the warmth of this poem.
Patricia Turner02/01/10
There's true sense of warmth that radiates from this poem, inviting the reader into the lovely scene. Very nicely done.
Carol Slider 02/01/10
What a lovely and tender poem! There are some emotions too deep for words. Well done.
Barbara Lynn Culler02/01/10
Dr. Sharon Schuetz02/01/10
I loved it.
Patricia Herchenroether02/03/10
This is beautiful; I would love your cottage!
Loren T. Lowery02/03/10
Beautiful, inspired by a deep love and a gentle soul.
Pamela Kliewer02/03/10
This is absolutely beautiful.