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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Huh? (01/21/10)

TITLE: A Bargain--Huh
By Verna Cole Mitchell


My dad, who loved a bargain more
Than anyone I know,
Had planned on going shopping, and
He wanted us to go.

Now we were newly married and
Were poor as we could be.
We planned to spend no money then;
On that we did agree.

We climbed into the car with him
And headed into town.
We parked and walked beside the shops,
Just looking all around.

One clothing store was having sales;
So Dad went in and shopped.
As he was looking through the racks,
He, all at once, just stopped.

“Huh! Look at this nice suit I found,”
Said Dad with twinkling eyes,
“It only costs five dollars here;
I’ve really found a prize.”

He said to my new husband then,
“You really ought to buy it.
I’m guessing it’s a perfect fit.
Just take it back and try it.”

“Huh, what’d you say?” my hubby said,
“A suit for just five dollars?
I bet it doesn’t every have
Two sleeves, a front, or collar.”

And when Dad held it up to see,
I wasn’t much impressed.
“It doesn’t look so good to me,”
I wanted to protest.

The color was a dingy gray,
But all the parts were there.
It was as ugly of a suit
As I’d seen anywhere.

To please my Dad, we bought that suit,
Our true thoughts not revealing.
We loved him, and he was so pleased--
We couldn’t hurt his feelings.

We took it home and found a place
Where we could safely store it.
We kept it for a lot of years;
My husband never wore it…Huh!

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Beth LaBuff 01/28/10
The sweet innocence of this made me smile. What a memory! (this is true, right?) :)
Patricia Herchenroether01/29/10
Flows like a bubbling brook. Love it.
Lollie Hofer 01/31/10
This was a fun poem to read. I could just picture that awful gray suit in my mind. (I don't wear earrings and when my daughter was about 4 years old, she bought me some gaudy blue earrings that were HUGE. We went out to eat later that day and she insisted I wear those things. And yes, I did wear them.)
Bryan Ridenour02/01/10
Great poem and a wonderful take on "huh." Good job!
Jackie Wilson02/01/10
What fun! The meter and simplicity of the poem fit the story so well.
Loren T. Lowery02/01/10
What a delight to read and its rhyme/meter reminded me of a wonderful combination of both Dr. Seuss and Clement Moore : )
Celeste Ammirata02/01/10
A sweet, very well written poem of love. Well done!
Noel Mitaxa 02/01/10
Simple language, simple rhythm and simple warmth. It recalled for me my $3 vee-knee (remember them?) blue jeans (with purple vees) I proudly bought and (embarrassingly) wore soon after we were married back in '75. Aahh, nostalgia.
Chely Roach02/01/10
What a fun, kind of bouncy poem. Loved the message through the newlyweds. Well done!
Carol Slider 02/01/10
This was a fun poem, delightful to read! Loved it!
The Masked Truelovers02/02/10
well written...I was creating my own little half tune to go with the rhyme of it.
Carol Penhorwood 02/02/10
My thoughts were the same as Lisa's: the things we do for love...
Great writing, as always!
Joy Faire Stewart02/03/10
Oh, this is a fun read, and I love the message. Excellent!
Scarlett Farr 02/03/10
Not usually a poetry fan but this one caught my attention. Very sweet.
Sarah Elisabeth 02/04/10
sweet story and message! loved the flow of the poem