The Official Writing Challenge
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Yeah, I've made one or two of those overly-active-imagination phone calls myself. Big oops.

I would have liked to know a little more about the eccentric old woman--I felt sympathy for her.
Your opening is awesome - great attention grabber! I agree that I wanted to know more about Janice. I felt a little thrown by the 911 call, it just seemed a little far-fetched considering the eccentricities of Janice. Wonderful voice in this piece.
Interesting story- kept my attention.

I am wondering why she left work to go to this woman's home for cookies.

I would also like to know what made the mc think anyone was dead. Why not just ask where the boyfriend was?
Never blame a mistake when a good conspiracy may be lurking. An intriguing fun read. Well done.