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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Oops (01/14/10)

TITLE: Pantoum for the Tortoise and the Hare
By Linda Payne
01/17/10


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In that stomach-dropping instant that opens our eyes
with our pants ‘round our ankles, we are caught unaware;
in that kick-ourselves moment when we realize
that the slow-plodding tortoise has beaten the hare.

With our pants ‘round our ankles, we are caught unaware
and the heat slowly creeps from our toes to our head,
for the slow-plodding tortoise has beaten the hare
and a blush turns our face a bright, bright beet red.

The heat slowly creeps from our toes to our head
from an error in judgment, or a deed left undone,
and a blush turns our face a bright, bright beet red
because we’ve been caught snoozing in the warm summer sun.

An error in judgment, or a deed left undone,
foolish pride is a temptress who leads us astray,
and we are caught snoozing in the warm summer sun,
so, sheepishly, “Oops” is all we can say.

Foolish pride is a temptress who leads us astray,
to that kick-ourselves moment when we realize
and, sheepishly, “Oops” is all we can say
in that stomach-dropping instant that opens our eyes.


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Barbara Lynn Culler01/22/10
I did not know what a Pantoum was, but figured it out as I read the poem. WOW! That must have taken a lot of time. And it is so true.

Should be a winning spot!
Charla Diehl 01/26/10
You took this difficult style of poetry and created a great message for your readers. I'm still clapping for you. Great use of the topic.
Virgil Youngblood 01/26/10
Ahhh -- a master word smith is at work here. Well done.
Patricia Turner01/26/10
Very masterfully written and poetically picturesque. I think I like the pantoum style. Fantastic.
Noel Mitaxa 01/27/10
Congratulations. You've tortoise what a pantoum is. If it were set to music, we may also 'hare' it as the Pantoum of the Opera!
But thank you for your clear portrayal of the pantoumonium that comes our way if we aren't in tune with God's grace.
Very clever and well done.