The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/10
The last verse tripped me up a bit, but I did understand the story. Poor Operator! At least Cellphones are still useful for something, LOL. Thanks for sharing.
01/26/10
Oh how things have changed! Another time, another place! Kids now would have no idea what you were talking about!!
01/27/10
This was not a smooth read at all no cadence or meter rhyme. A nice story but for a limited audience. Anyone under 50 will not have a clue what you're speaking of.
01/27/10
I'm definitely over 50 and remember this era, along with party lines, etc. You have a good plot, but the poem wasn't quite rhythmic. Perhaps a re-write in prose? A cute story.
01/27/10
Blank verse is generally identified by a regular meter, but no end rhyme.
I did discern a pattern (cadence/meter), here (perhaps more apparent if read outloud):
/---/-/-/-/-/ (x1)
-/-/-/-/ (x6)
/---/-/-/-/-/ (x1) etc.