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01/14/10
A very sweet story, I bet you already caught that peaked should peeked,I hate it when I do it too! You captured the heart of the little girl and the teacher. Well done.
01/15/10
Sweet, Sweet story...tugged my heartstrings! Keep writing!
01/15/10
Very well written. What a precious story. Thank you.
01/18/10
a lovely lovely story until the ending which to me just fell a little flat. I think the words of the phonecall just seemd too abrupt, too easily mended. Perhaps you could have had the teachers thoughts and her decision to reach for the phone to call the child.
Just an idea from the readers perspective.
My heart ached for Anna. She seems older than 5. Perhaps a break between POV shifts?

It's a great story.
01/21/10
Congratulations on placing in your level! Have you checked out the Writing Challenge forums?