The Official Writing Challenge
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Very poignant. A good reminder of our responsibilities to help the helpless.
This is so very good. You took something quirky and treated it with maturity and it worked.
I also appreciate the message given in this heart-wrenching poetic tale.
I learned this lesson in the past few months. I suspected, but couldn't know for I know.

Powerful & thought-provoking.
Like a catchy tune, but such a sad story...
Such a heartbreaker. You've told the story with a painful beauty. Well done.
This makes me cry--so sad. I hate to see this kind of abuse happening to children. Oh, what a reminder to be the adult and step in to help the helpless!
Ahh...this is so sad! Thanks for reminding NOT to mind our own business, but to make the welfare of all children our business.
I have goosebumps. A double "OW" - the little girl and the one who didn't want to interfere.
A tear jerky in rhyme. This is wonderful writing. Thanks - Colin
Such a sweet and sad story... but such an encouraging message of grace and forgiveness. Congratulations on yuor high placement for your level and in the Editor's Choice!!!
Congratulations on placing 3rd! So well deserved! A heart breaking story of love and forgiveness and one whose story will touch many lives and change them for good! Thank you!
Debbie, this was superb! and so true and so sad. Anyone that grew up in a home like this can feel this poem... and even when the "ows" are verbal hits, it's just as horrific! Great writing. Congrats~
Such a constant reminder...
Touching poem. Sometimes it's so hard to know if there really is abuse going on--may we all be attentive. You had quite a few punctuation errors, but I liked the flow of the poem. Good job!