The Official Writing Challenge
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Very thoughtful message with a great gotcha ending. Like the title, too.
01/18/10
Needs some work, the third party speak in a couple of places did not flow well. I guess the 'gotcha' at the end was the "ow". Keep writing.
God's passion is people. I heard someone say the other day how it pains Him when one dies without Him.

Good job with this.