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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Ow! (01/07/10)

TITLE: Willie the Whine
By vincent lyons
01/10/10


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Ow! How he’d complain
At the slightest pain;
He’d whimper and protest and moan;
The instant retort
To which he’d resort—
Ow! He’d mumble and grumble and groan.

Ow! Willie would whine
His well rehearsed line
At the smallest hint of an ache,
A wee shaving nick,
A little pin prick—
Ow! One mighty commotion he’d make.

All those who knew him
Would snigger and grin
Whenever the drama began—
The most favoured line
Of Willie the Whine—
Ow! Catchcry of the whinging man!

It was quite a sight
To see him excite
The affections of someone new;
His loud “ow’s” of pain
Would sympathy gain—
Ow! If only they really knew!!

One day, sure enough
Like one who cried “wolf”
His whining near brought his demise;
His friends were so used
To his whining abuse,
They ignored his imploring cries.

Hours later they found
Him battered and bound—
He’d been robbed and beaten by thieves;
In time he got well
And he lived to tell
The danger when no one believes.

Now Willie the Whine
Spends all of his time
Warning others not to tell lies--
To never arouse
Contempt with their ‘ows’,
False ‘ow’s’ he’ll forever despise.


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Barbara Lynn Culler01/14/10
This was a great story. I figured he would have the injury no one heard.
This would make a cute ballad!
Lynda Schultz 01/14/10
Very good—excellent lesson included.
Charla Diehl 01/15/10
Well written and certainly fits the topic. Fun read wrapped around a good message.
Beth LaBuff 01/16/10
Wonderful work on this! Love the poetic form!
DANIEL MBAJIORGU01/16/10
This is just beautiful. Like Beth pointed out, the poetic form is splendid. And it carries an instructional message. Once again, this is beautiful.
Peter Stone01/16/10
Funny! Loved the twist there, and the lesson woven into the poem.
Dee Yoder 01/17/10
Poor Willie--but he had to learn his lesson at some point!
Lisa Johnson 01/21/10
This poem is very nicely done...and has a very good message. Congratulations on being Highly Commended on your level, and your placement in the Editor's Choice!!!
Carol Penhorwood 01/21/10
Congratulations on being "Highly Commended"--a title well deserved on this piece! A great poem with a great lesson!