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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Ow! (01/07/10)

TITLE: The No Beefalo Ouch Song
By Henry Clemmons
01/08/10


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It was sweet
Travelin’ round
On a trip
Down in Mexico

She was close
Breathin’ soft
In my ear
At the Studio

I was young
Foolin’ round
To the songs
On the radio

She was dark
Dance-n close
On my arm
In my bungalow


Life flies straight
north-n-south
not a noise
till the fan explodes
And then crash
on a dime
with a pinch
from the Holy Ghost
To get nipped
on my pride
and my race
let me realize
Had to change
open eyes
and my mind
for the way to go


Then a thorn
Nice and sharp
Pricked my heart
And it’s cardio

She cried no
Had to go
Said she won’t
Date no beefalo

Had to stop
Catch my breath
Saw my skin
Down in Mexico

Let her bounce
Mumbled ouch
Stood in mute
To the audio


Life flies straight
north-n-south
not a noise
till the fan explodes
And then crash
on a dime
with a pinch
from the Holy Ghost
To get nipped
on my pride
and my race
let me realize
Had to change
open eyes
and my mind
for the way to go


Quit my wine
Lost my Rhyme
On my way
To my daddy’s church

Sat alone
Left my pride
Cold outside
In the Dodge I drove

Found the pew
Cleared my throat
Spoke a prayer
And I made Him Lord

Shed my shirt
Freed from sin
Got some Son
On my lighter skin


Life flies straight
north-n-south
not a noise
till the fan explodes
And then crash
on a dime
with a pinch
from the Holy Ghost
To get nipped
on my pride
and my race
let me realize
Had to change
open eyes
and my mind
for the way to go


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Lisa Johnson 01/14/10
Interesting take on the subject...and very unique poetry style.
Jackie Wilson01/14/10
The unusual format fit your lyrics very well. Good choice, I could hear the guitar and the castanets in the background!
Karlene Jacobsen 01/17/10
Catchy lyrics. Could see this as a video. Nice job.
Arlene Showalter 01/18/10
this was a HOOT! Loved it!
Verna Cole Mitchell 01/18/10
Great rhythm here...and a good message as well.
Lollie Hofer 01/18/10
The flow, cadence, rhyme, message were ALL powerful. Great message. I liked the uniqueness in using this week's theme.